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Brultze · Wed, 29th-Dec-2010, 1:25 AM

Alright ive finally updated the story. Pls tell me what you think of the last 2 parts of the story and what could be done to improve it

. All feedback is appreciated

Zeion · Wed, 29th-Dec-2010, 5:11 PM

HD opens a cupboard filled with various colored potion.

“Hmmm, what should I bring with me this time round? Mana potions looks good and so does the regeneration potion. Ooo the invisible potion will do me well too” mumbled the old elder while fumbling.

“Apth!! Have you seen my bloodlust potion? I am thinking of bringing that along!” Bellowed HD who is starting to be impatient.

“Master.. it’s right… beside..*pant* your left *pant* hand..” Apth ran into the tent in fear of scolded by his master.

“Right? Left? Are you making a fool of me Apth?!” HD eyed the panting apprentice.

Apth quickly ran towards the cupboard and pick the deep red potion and placed it in his master’s hands.

“Here it.. *pant* is master…” Apth dip his head down still trying to catch his breath from the run to the tent.

“You may leave now… and dun forget to practice that spell I told you! We will leave tomorrow! I believe Paw has reach her destination.. we should make haste and so do you with that spell!”

“Aye my dear master!” with that Apth exit the tent leaving HD staring at the bloodlust potion.

“Bloodlust.. hoo hooo… how long has it been when I last use this..” HD smiled while recalling the number of people who died under his hands while being in the influence of that potion.

Brultze · Wed, 29th-Dec-2010, 5:15 PM

You know I actually am not sue whether HD is good or not

Zeion · Wed, 29th-Dec-2010, 5:16 PM

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Originally Posted by Brultze

You know I actually am not sue whether HD is good or not

THAT'S GOOD! if u dunno, so does the community! =D wahaha.. keep the suspense..

**SkyBreaker** · Thu, 30th-Dec-2010, 8:29 PM

Haha this is a seriously awesome story, read all of it thus far, keep it up!

Brultze · Thu, 30th-Dec-2010, 8:48 PM

ty sky

. glad to have another person follow us

. We do our best to keep the awesomeness flowing

Brultze · Thu, 30th-Dec-2010, 8:50 PM

btw zeion? can you write the part for the fight between paw and benji? Im not good at it at all and it seems that your better a writer than i am so i think you can do it better than me.

Zeion · Thu, 30th-Dec-2010, 11:55 PM

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Originally Posted by Brultze

btw zeion? can you write the part for the fight between paw and benji? Im not good at it at all and it seems that your better a writer than i am so i think you can do it better than me.

okay =D just let me gather my tots and it will be up in a jiffy =)

Zeion · Fri, 31st-Dec-2010, 12:37 AM

Benji pointed a finger at Paw and mysteriously Paw started to float.. the barrier spell began to fade.. Paw panicked.. she had no idea what spell did Benji cast..

Paw quickly tries to summon a spell but nothing seems to work..

"haha.. where is your big words now bout defeating me? I am Benji the wizard from Alranra as u know but you have no idea wad's my nickname.. " smirked Benji while his cloak flares towards the sky even though there's no wind.

"well since you're going to die to this spell, i will let you know.. They use to call me Point Kill.. which i guess you should know why.."

"HAHAHA! this spell you cast is called "Siphon".. draining the life force of your opponent and mana if a mage.. That's y i can't cast any spell"

Paw stared Benji.. Her blue iris fades to white.. Her hair raises like fire.. and she start to chant..

"Beliaever ofe Thodra caells toe ydou! Gvive lifee toe thse needfed asnd regplenish whaet hfe lackk! Dsispel whaet isf casst asnd retgurn itf backk!!

A huge invisible force slammed Benji throw him towards a nearby wall breaking it down as if it was made of sand..

Benji wasn't able to throw up a barrier in time and took the spell head on.. suddenly Benji is being lifted in the air like Paw was before..

"How does it feel to have a taste of your own medicine?" Paw is back on her feet and had a finger pointed at Benji..

"well.. let me tell you something... it's seems to me that you know me as0 Paw, daughter of the great wizard HD.. but... what bout my nickname?" Paw smiled evilly at Benji who is struggling just to keep alive..

"i am also known as Mirror Paw... "

Brultze · Fri, 31st-Dec-2010, 1:18 AM

Lol nice job zeion. But why would paw laugh at death? And venji seems evil now after trying to kill paw

**HDPhoenix** · Fri, 31st-Dec-2010, 2:49 AM

I love my daughter! She sounds so awesome ^^

Zeion · Fri, 31st-Dec-2010, 12:59 PM

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Originally Posted by Brultze

Lol nice job zeion. But why would paw laugh at death? And venji seems evil now after trying to kill paw

it's not evil la.. it's known as bearing a grudge after being looked down mah~

@HD lol.. you are going to be more awesome for sure... i think.. i am still carving your charter attributes but slowly but surely..

Brultze · Fri, 31st-Dec-2010, 1:26 PM

lol kk zeion

PinkandWhite · Fri, 31st-Dec-2010, 2:19 PM

hahaah so funny! nice! hello HD daddy ^^V

Brultze · Fri, 31st-Dec-2010, 9:41 PM

Lol. Paw has accepted HD as her father

HD will be so happy

Nightmare · Fri, 31st-Dec-2010, 10:00 PM

Rofl! Make moar!

Brultze · Fri, 31st-Dec-2010, 10:10 PM

Lol zeion has to continue the fighting part first before I write. I suck at it

So hurry zeion the fans re waiting

Zeion · Mon, 3rd-Jan-2011, 8:57 PM

Benji feels his life force draining.. though he know the counter-spell for his against his own spell, he dun wish to use it in fear of people knowing and in future, this Siphon spell would be rendered useless.. but his life is at stake! Benji is caught in between..

Paw still grinning away.. watching Benji slowly turning pale.. She's waiting for Benji to give up giving her the win and of cos.. acknowledge her being a better mage den he is..

"DESPFELL!"

Benji was break free from the effect of his own spell while Paw looking for the culprit who interfered.

"That's enough! the world is at stake here and you two trying to kill each other?!" Jaczie shouted..

"and Paw.. dun bother being a mirror against me.. All my skills is mind manipulation.. nothing in regards to spell no mana.. your personal best skill is being an anti mage and nothing more.. a full fledge warrior with a sword in hand would beat you fair and square.. know your place!"

"aye madam.." Paw does know her place but she doesn't liked to be looked down at all..

Both the boys kept silent.. the battle was beyond their comprehension and for sure.. they have much to learn..

"now since this is settled, let's go back to the meeting room! i have some schedule to discuss with you people.. Kelly! clean this mess up!" Jaczie stomped off.. obviously furious by the action of the young ones but in her heart, she knows it might be a good training for all who was involved..

Brultze · Mon, 3rd-Jan-2011, 11:26 PM

Nice job with the last part zeion

. I'll try and do the next part ASAP. But with school starting again I won't have as much time

**kellyMILKIES** · Tue, 4th-Jan-2011, 1:14 AM

I shall clean this mess up and kill everyone. muhahaha