so first of all you build a gate on 12 which is OK but not optimal since you are forced to miss a probe, if you delay it slightly you can have constant probe production (it's a very good thing)
same thing with your 2nd gas.
and you forget your pylon, obviously not great, the first few pylons are very important make sure you don't get supply blocked so early in the game
lots of gaps in probe production and not spending chrono (on probes)
some more supply blocks
kinda weird build, you go for chronod out warp gate but don't attack when it finishes, and then you make a stargate too before your attack. If you're gonna chrono out something for offense go hit him as it finishes.
lots of missed probes, make sure you are keeping up with your macro.
at 10 minutes you destroy his natural and have a huge advantage in every regard (production, income, bases, probes, army) just go and kill him. keep making reinforcing units and you could bust down his main ramp easily. especially with a few more zealots
you walk into his nat and don't attack for some reason? even though you are still at an advantage. plus your stalkers can safely kill all those pylons without being in danger.
missing lots of probes
forgetting upgrades
still not attacking even though your army is way stronger
you finally attack, and then you win??
generally you should post your losses as it is easier to provide more helpful feedback.
"why did i lose?" is a lot easier and more specific (and therefore more helpful) as opposed to "what did i do wrong?" which is way too general and difficult to provide adequate and encompassing feedback. Also when you practice you should be focusing on improving one aspect of your play at a time instead of trying to learn everything at once.
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